I'm feeling pretty good about my rough draft. I think that by putting in a lot of different things in my rough draft it made the peer review better. By not really going into a lot of details with anything it let me know what parts people would be interested in and want to read more about. During the peer revision process I learned that my essay was a bit repetitive, and that I should add a specific example of when a loss really affected me. I have an idea of what direction I want to go in know. I think I've done a good job of getting my beliefs across even without going into details. I plan on cutting out some of my repetitive sentences, and putting in a story that will connect to the reader and pull their interest towards my essay.
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